Leftovers (FFF II Results)

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*Author’s note: Still not there, but I can feel the flash muscles warming up.

The last time Aoide ate the moon, she had terrible indigestion but at least she wasn’t cranky. Being a handmaiden to a goddess had it perks, but when the goddess becomes cranky, there’s hell to pay. Sweeping up the crumbs from the latest gorging into a burlap sack, Eulalia wondered what had brought on such a craving. She peeked through the veils, satisfied the goddess was content for the moment, and nodded to the guardian as she dragged the sack to the kitchens.

Aoide’s song filled the hallways, musical notes kissing the cheeks of the travelers as they milled back and forth. Eulalia smiled as she hurried along the corridor; the moon had improved her mistress’s tone. She glanced out the window at the sky; no one was apt to miss the moon until nightfall. She arrived at the doors of the kitchen, and pushing through, deposited the sack near the roaring fireplace. The head cook spared her a look, noted the sack, and nodded to Eulalia. He’d know what to do with the leftovers.

Eulalia took hold of the lavender stream of song and let the notes carry her back to her duties.

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12 thoughts on “Leftovers (FFF II Results)

  1. Eula was the name of my paternal grandmother, who died right after i was born. i looked up the name, and it means “to talk well”.

    often i’ll look up names and their meanings. Aoide was the muse of song.

    glad you stopped by, girly-o.


  2. Neat. Interesting thing to think about — goddesses who actually eat moons. The first one must have been green cheese. You’d get along with Mary. She almost always uses names for characters that reflect something about them. Of course writing a historical, with old Latin names, you can get away with that.

  3. heh, eric! i never thought about the green cheese, but you’re probably right.

    i’m with mary — although the reader may never know the meaning behind a chosen name, *i* do when i write, and sometimes that helps the story.

    it raises an interesting question — do we define our name, or does our name define us, to a certain extent?

    thanks for stopping by. 🙂

  4. On the whole it works well enough as it stands. The big problem for me was one of identity. In the first sentence you talk about Aoide and then begin the second sentence with ‘Being a handmaiden to a goddess had it perks…’ and I immediately assumed that Aoide was the handmaiden. This happens a couple of times in the piece. Of course rereading the piece we know better but it’s still a weakness. Good opening line mind.

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  5. thanks, jim…i noticed that also, and that will definitely be fixed on the re-write. i posted this with no edits, which is like going out in public with no makeup or underwear. heh.

    i’m glad you like it, fay 🙂 it reminds me of “Dead Line” a little.

    heh, susan! the same thing occurred to me, and a few other questions i think i may need to answer . it’s a struggle for me, because i love flash so much, do i leave it as is or expand it to a short story? i’m so pleased you like it, and thanks for popping ’round!


  6. Hey. I’d only do this for you – make a jackass out of myself. I posted the flash for Friday, 9/5 at my place. I might need a crash course on prompts. I think I’m trying too hard to include all elements… and this prompt wasn’t easy for my brain. 🙂

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  7. you did great reenie — that was a cute piece, and i think you had fun with it. it read like you had fun, anyway. i’m so glad you’re playing along — it’s nice flexing that muscle again, isn’t it?


  8. Hey, Nets! Sorry if I sounded like a whiny-pants yesterday. There wasn’t much of my brain to flex by midnight last night! But you are SO right – it’s fun getting back into words. Other than my posts at Journalscape, I haven’t written a single word.

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  9. Okay. You know what assuming does to a person, right? Well, I assumed everyone knew what a moonpie is – I guess it’s a regional delectable. LOL. Fay had no clue. LOL, again. And no reason he should have known, Lol-ing again.

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